SUPA: Infinite (541 hits)
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Submitted by ahumblefool (View user info) at 2007-04-13 14:02:17 EDT
Two years ago I hiked up to the top of Mount Excelsior, a small peak. It was a an exceptionally clear day, and I decided to sleep at the top to observe the stars. I have never before seen the sky so clearly. The Milky Way peered down on me, and I felt small and insignificant. I watched meterorites streak across the sky, and I let my mind wander to the vastness of what is out there.
Anyway, this poem is written in increasing syllables one per stanza. From 1 - 13 and then back down to 1 again. I was trying to capture the feeling of how small I felt and how infinite our universe is.
I have attached a collage of images from the Hubble Telescope for each space object I name.
Infinite
Night
Flight
Moonbright
Starlight
Calming breeze
Gentle tease
By small degrees
With expertise
My body reaches
Heaven beseeches
As night envelopes me
To a higher degree
The celestial wonders
To view God's greatest blunders
Saturn rings, comet dust flows
Jupiter's sister red spot glows
Pluto awaits me farther in space
Spiral galaxy pulls me with grace
Floating much farther than ever before
Nebulas beauty reflected once more
Planetary nebula gaseous cocoon
Ghost Head Nebula as bright as harvest moon
Three Trillion Mile long jet from a wobbly star
Massive star VY Canis Majoris so far
Planetary Debris Disk encircling yellow dwarf
Globular Cluster 47 Tucanae morph
Millions of galaxies beckon me to reach them
Monocerotis shines like a sapphire gem
Is there an end, could I travel ever more
I lay on the mountain I can not ignore
My body calls me homeward I must turn
Away from the beauty although I yearn
To find an end to this universe
Its wonders so many and diverse
Sliding backwards towards my home land
The mountain and the meadowland
Neptune's blue welcomes me home
Red planet I can not roam
Dawn is approaching me
To a lesser degree
Small and infinite
I approach sunlight
On this small trek
I am a speck
Earth again
In the main
Daylight
Earthbright
Day
Stay
User Reviews
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-18 23:52:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Never in my wildest dreams did I think I ever had anything to fear from "VY Canis Majoris."
Well played, AHF. This was assssstronomical.
Tee hee.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-18 20:13:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"Pluto awaits me farther in space
Spiral galaxy pulls me with grace"
Makes me smile. I'd love to see stars like that.
This reminds me of some Joanna Newsom lyrics-
Anyhow- I sat by your side, by the water
You taught me the names of the stars overhead that I wrote down in my ledger
Though all I knew of the rote universe were those pleiades loosed in December
I promised you I'd set them to verse so I'd always remember
That the meteorite is a source of the light, and the meteor's just what we see
And the meteoroid is a stone that's devoid of the fire that propelled it to thee
And the meteorite's just what causes the light, and the meteor's how it's perceived
And the meteoroid's a bone thrown from the void that lies quiet in offering to thee..
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2007-04-18 11:20:00 EDT (#)
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Good stuff.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-18 09:54:05 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-18 09:53:59 EDT (#)
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1.5. I really like this idea. It's pretty clever.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-17 08:31:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2007-04-16 16:02:43 EDT (#)
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very interesting
Submitted by MouthSore (user info) at 2007-04-15 00:24:57 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-04-14 22:09:29 EDT (#)
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cool
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-04-14 21:30:51 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-04-14 00:08:26 EDT (#)
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For example, I would have changed:
The celestial wonders
Shine above God's greatest blunders
Is there an end, could I travel ever more
No I'm stuck on the mountain, this I can't ignore
etc.
Astronomy + inf
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-04-13 23:34:00 EDT (#)
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Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-04-13 11:19:58 PDT (#)
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beautiful.
thanks for sharing that
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Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-13 11:16:21 PDT (#)
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fucking speechless.....
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-13 20:22:41 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by silent1 (user info) at 2007-04-13 18:20:44 EDT (#)
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Beautiful.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-04-13 15:01:43 EDT (#)
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There will be no throat fucking thank you.
Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:58:23 EDT (#)
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Very nice
Submitted by Draco (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:54:14 EDT (#)
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+2 for the pictures
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:50:09 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:41:19 EDT (#)
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somebody throat fuck Beano with a kangaroo dick.
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lol, I needed a good laugh today, thanks for the uplift :)
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:41:19 EDT (#)
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somebody throat fuck Beano with a kangaroo dick.
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:39:10 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:35:41 EDT (#)
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Super idea and concept, however this was not a well written poem.
Sorry to spoilt your fest.
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No worries Beano. Thanks for your honesty.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:35:41 EDT (#)
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Super idea and concept, however this was not a well written poem.
Sorry to spoilt your fest.
Submitted by ThatsGodToYouBitches (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:24:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love this
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:22:11 EDT (#)
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wowwie wow.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:21:15 EDT (#)
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not to keen on the words but the pic was kool
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:19:58 EDT (#)
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beautiful.
thanks for sharing that
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:16:21 EDT (#)
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fucking speechless.....
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:13:36 EDT (#)
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:05:44 EDT (#)
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WINNER of SUPA, right here, folks!
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:11:48 EDT (#)
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TAMPA MOTHERFUCKERS!
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:09:12 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by NoMeD (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:07:40 EDT (#)
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I like the way this was written.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:05:44 EDT (#)
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WINNER of SUPA, right here, folks!
That was an EXCELLENT poem concept, my friend...simple, yet moving.
Makes me go want to climb some mountains myself.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:04:12 EDT (#)
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Monocerotis shines like a sapphire gem
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They have a cream for that
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-04-13 14:03:29 EDT (#)
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I almost feel educated