SUPA: The Phoenix (456 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.87 on 20 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by goferforhire <goferforhire.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2007-04-16 13:22:04 EDT
When daylight's dawn is beating drums,
the Phoenix like the morning comes
with flailing wings it whistles, hums
and rises from its ashen sun.
Like Lucifer, he fell from grace-
O decadent death! O dark disgrace!
But like old Morningstar gave chase
he rises from his darkened place.
He ruptures starlight, fractures night,
and decks the earth in burning light;
like ancient angels, pale and white
the Phoenix's halo burns so bright.
The ashes stir, the Phoenix calls-
O cursed night when brightness falls!
From broken glass and crumbling walls,
his fire mends less than it mauls.
And let the meter fall, for now,
as Phaethon calls his tortures near;
no patterned speech or cultured rhymes
could capture, quite, our building fear.
What poetry could capture death,
what verse could grasp a world's collapse;
that heart's last beat, that lung's last breath-
what words could speak of these with grace?
When daylight's dawn is beating drums,
we hide among the ruined towns,
When Phoenix like the morning comes,
it's wise, my dear, to not be found.
And when those old and ancient sons,
those angels at Jehova's side
Are standing in the morning sun
to face their coming death with pride-
O end of days, O coming night,
The Phoenix comes to bring the light.
User Reviews
Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2007-04-19 11:44:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
haha just read your comment....
I think you're younger than I but you are WAY more mature
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-19 04:19:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh. heh. Not that it matters now. (whew!...glad I didn't cause any drama.)
It really was quite good.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-19 04:07:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Normally I would give this a 2... but I have to say I liked the sandwich's poem a little better.
oh, and: "his fire mends less than it mauls."
Gave me a small cramp.
Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2007-04-19 01:20:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
AWESOME POEM.
Good stuff.
Like I said before, George Mason would have never made the final four if they had to play Duke every round.
Oh and that thing a while back; emekkawan posted some pic of you so that's why I thought it was your alter. it is here:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/98592
unless that isn't you.
Anyhow, good luck in the next round!
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-18 23:50:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I think the Duke Dog must afford people a respect and appreciation for history and mythology.
This is absolutely right up my alley. It 'reads' old school, and I love that.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-04-18 22:47:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This deserves a lot more hits.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-18 13:33:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2007-04-18 12:18:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-16 14:04:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This post kicked the devil in the nuts, then took his candy away from him.
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-04-17 21:09:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Give me beer and whiskey, O Lord, and please let me be inconsequential.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:09:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
this was righteous, homey.
very good indeed. clean simple lines, flowed very well, created great mental imagery...i liked it thoroughly.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-17 08:33:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yep, that'll do it.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-04-16 22:34:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wee bit cheesy but I forgive you.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-16 15:16:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
1.5
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-16 15:15:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-16 14:47:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
love it..
Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2007-04-16 14:14:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-16 14:05:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I found this particularly interesting, considering my round 2 entry last year was about a phoenix: http://www.ubersite.com/m/85761
The difference is that yours kicks much more ass.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-16 14:04:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This post kicked the devil in the nuts, then took his candy away from him.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-16 13:47:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
mmm...multiple Os.
I like the chances you took with rhyme, it works. Very good.
Submitted by NoMeD (user info) at 2007-04-16 13:35:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This kicks ass, on at least six levels.