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Category: RomanceRating: 1.19 on 23 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (View user info) at 2007-12-14 20:59:15 EST
Dave's body twisted and contorted as if under the impulse of strong electrical jolts. Balls of sweat raced each other down his forehead and then flew across the bed as his dark lashes flicked them away.
The girl, so close to his face, moaned and writhed.
When she wasn't moaning, a slippery slapping sound clicked around Dave's ears.
He could feel his mind melting. Orgasm, that gorgeous temporary suicide so closely analagous to heaven, or blacking out on drugs, began to heat him.
He began to move faster and, on cue, the girl's moans became faster, more ragged.
He was getting hotter, and his hand slid across the sheets with a slow but purposeful inertia.
He gripped the bedhead and the muscles up his arm retracted into defined coils. Part of him seemed to believe that he would spin out of orbit if he didn't anchor himself. His knuckles blanched.
Her moans became louder, now interspersed with small pleas, prayers of gibberish and ecstacy.
Dave felt his whole body tightening. It felt like every muscle was straining against his skeleton, desperate to push the burning heat from his body.
It started to come, and his mind was emptied of everything except its burning purity. Flying. Burning. He was a comet.
He roared.
Dave opened his eyes and gasped, breathless. Rivulets of sweat poured down his face, around his nose. He let them drip, let them soak.
"That was amazing" he whispered.
Dave logged off, closed the laptop and then began to clean the cum first off his hands, then off his Optimus Prime themed sheets.
User Reviews
Submitted by DasHeer (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:14:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-12-17 13:28:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I rather liked the disjointed style of this writing.
Submitted by triangle_man (user info) at 2007-12-17 11:33:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
purge
welcome back uniter
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2007-12-17 11:06:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2007-12-16 21:44:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hahaha!
Submitted by Tjhom (user info) at 2007-12-16 16:47:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
ewwwwwww
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-12-16 11:32:38 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-12-15 22:37:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It started to come, and his mind was emptied of everything except its burning purity. Flying. Burning. He was a comet.
-------That was my favorite line, but then....
Oh goddamnit. You had to ruin it with a fucking masturbatory joke. I was still amused though.
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2007-12-15 11:09:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Change the sheets to Star Wars and you have my typical Saturday night.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-12-15 02:05:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
This is so utterly terrible it became good.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-12-15 01:17:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
its 06:16 and im awake, its a funny tale, it may qualify as EI's story of next week. keep tuned fight fans.
what do i do now?
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-12-15 01:12:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:04:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-12-14 22:56:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
*knock knock*
Uhh, hello. This is Ubersite maintenance. It appears an overall positive rating has been left here due to an administrative mix up. In fact, this post was meant to receive a "-1.8". Sorry about the confusion.
_____
Touch a nerve, did I?
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He's a pissy little bitch - his nerves are always touched.
He's a toucher.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2007-12-15 00:41:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hahahaha
eerily reminiscent of:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/58511
Submitted by polyamorousaj (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:25:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hahahaha
eerily reminiscent of:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/94191
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:14:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
this turned me on
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:04:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-12-14 22:56:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
*knock knock*
Uhh, hello. This is Ubersite maintenance. It appears an overall positive rating has been left here due to an administrative mix up. In fact, this post was meant to receive a "-1.8". Sorry about the confusion.
_____
Touch a nerve, did I?
Submitted by TheBrad (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:03:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This made me happy for some reason.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2007-12-14 23:02:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
BY you, sentence structure better, needed is.
Although it made me chuckle.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-12-14 22:56:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
*knock knock*
Uhh, hello. This is Ubersite maintenance. It appears an overall positive rating has been left here due to an administrative mix up. In fact, this post was meant to receive a "-1.8". Sorry about the confusion.
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (user info) at 2007-12-14 21:48:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Holy fuck:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-fA00Svb240
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-12-14 21:07:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
your words are awkwardly put together
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2007-12-14 21:06:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
:D
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-12-14 21:06:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
needs more double-chin drips