<OHM> + a picture of a chin (873 hits)
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Submitted by Sars (View user info) at 2008-07-22 01:32:11 EDT
Squeezed with the repressed rage of a drunken father the darkness touches him.
He awakens with his head hung low with chin coming to rest almost on his chest and the silence is deafening. There is nothing in this wasteland, this no-man's land save this poor destitute soul. There are no thoughts in his mind. There are no feelings in his heart nor in his head.
Briefly.
FUCK. Did I go deaf and blind? No, my eyes were just shut. It's so dark here.
There is no source of light. The longer I look, the more I can see. Okay.
I'm okay. Good. No. there's nothing here. Nothing. Except some fucking asinine wall?!
No, not good! What the fuck is this? This floor feels... off. There is no sky. I'm not inside. Peanut butter.
As the gears start to turn it's like an old machine that hasn't been used but left abandoned, forgotten. It feels as though it will take centuries to figure out how to move those dumb limbs, heavy head; don't forget breathing?
My head lifts up and the cobwebs start to shake off, the spiders confused and scattering.
I know this isn't what life was like before, but I can't remember what or if there was anything before. Thoughts drift in and around as though blown by a lazy breezy on a summer afternoon in New Orleans. A breeze I know doesn't exist in this plane. Sometimes I can hear others walking by talking, sneezing, laughing. No one is here, though. Ghosts in my head?
My head is swarming and my eyes are drifting like bunnies on viagara inside my skull. Are they looking for something?
After picking up my frame I start for the wall. Looking warily down and up, left or right, there is no ending in sight. In fact, there is nothing in sight.
My eyes jerk around to the front again and I see my feet. Who painted them? Why can I see? It's just black here. Doesn't make sense. How can I see if there's no light? Why can I exist when I can't remember the last time I ate? How can the wall have no shadows no I'm hungry. Leave me be.
My head straightens out again back from its violent swinging my eyes feel so tired now and they keep leaking. My shin starts to throb and I look down to see the pile of dark-shiny behind me. It looks as though I've run into recently. The red-shiny stuff is leaking out of my shin, and I've got this shiny leak from my face.
I stop as I hear something cut through the air, straining hoping to know it's a door opening.
A little purple... rectangular, deeply unsettling creature pops up over the edge of this stupid wall. Down to the left, if there is direction anymore. Rectangular and smooth it is. Fuzzy smooth or marble smooth it's all the same from here; it's all the same to Fluffy he tells me. He's so ... ecstatic. He can be anything I want him to be, he tells me without speaking. I sigh relief.
All I can see is his eyes. His stupid grotesquely huge WHITE eyes in his purple head staring at me from over the wall; my apathetic head bounces off my chest. Does he blink? Make him blink.
This wall that I shouldn't be able to see because everything is FUCKING BLACK impregnates my whole vision.
He squeaks at me, sounding like some fucked up sing n read book, but I can understand him, he's just laughing at me though his eyes don't change his face is stone. His laughter crescendos. He's caterwauling now and without a mouth. I'm imbued with a blind rage at this .... This aching laughter.
Lunging toward him the wall gets no closer, his head eventually disappears with his laughter now threatening to burst open my skull, threatening to anally rape my eardrums, so tender they are Fluffy please stop Please stop can't you just help me Fluffy? Am I supposed to help YOU? The laughter, the maniacal laughter turns to erratic shrieking the wall seems to be moving away I can't keep my damned head straight his stone face won't move. He's laughing why's he laughing at me? I punch my head hoping it will straighten out spraying more sick-shiny shit everywhere. Not suprisingly my neck's wrenched itself in the wrong direction. Whiplash while fluffy was screeaughing.
I see my feet lurching forward toward the wall and a deep breath escapes my mouth along with more shiny-spray. I think I'm supposed to be carrying my body in some direction. A moment of pure lucidity greets me,
I need to get on the other side of that wall.
I look up and see Fluffy, his eyes have turned to dead stones. I force my head back to the front with my hands, why's it whipping around like this? His laughter's stopped, but I can still hear it, it keeps ringing in my head threatening to drive my brain to the asylum and back in a straight jacket with no crazy pills to satiate my addled mind. All I can see are his eyes, and I notice that they've gotten bigger, they've lost all shine though and his head slips away behind that damned colorless, shifting wall.
Running with the strength of 14 retarded apes I know my legs are beneath me that my head is straight and my arms intact. Only labored breathing and the ringing laughter remain in this place of scattered dreams and hopeless ashes.
remnants of hope that never was
minds colliding; catastrophic distractions.
I wake up with my head hung towards the ground, staring at my feet and vaguely recall ........
It slips away again. My head dips to the left all that breaks the monotony is a gargantuan nondescript wall.
User Reviews
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 17:16:32 EDT (#)
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meh.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-07-22 16:58:16 EDT (#)
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What... the... hell?..
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 16:30:14 EDT (#)
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I'd have to resize it so it could fit on the screen.
The picture I have is life-size....sooooo....
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 16:19:27 EDT (#)
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I can imagine.
It's getting ME hot.
Maybe you could post a pic on your next post?
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 16:13:17 EDT (#)
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No, I just pin that shit up. And since the flaps are so long, they just rub together ALL DAY LONG.
It's fucking hot.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 15:57:03 EDT (#)
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3 feet! That's pretty impressive.
Do you have to buy custom tailored pants?
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 15:37:27 EDT (#)
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OOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooOOOOOOOooh. MY GASH!!!
You should've just said that!
it's good, still attached, I guess. Unless you count my 3 feet of trailing beef curtains.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 15:00:22 EDT (#)
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Personally, I never heard of this expression myself until a week ago but I sure do like it.
You know, your honey pot...your money maker...your gash...your slot!
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 14:54:31 EDT (#)
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Wait, what's my snizz?
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 14:53:13 EDT (#)
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How's your snizz?
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 14:30:53 EDT (#)
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You're an idiot. Fuck you.
Submitted by Poots (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:15:00 EDT (#)
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you know how to do italics but don't know what an alter is?
I call shenanigans on you!
http://ocw.mit.edu/ans7870/21f/21f.027j/beato_people/image/vj49_execution_detail.jpg
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:00:10 EDT (#)
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Show me your hole.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:57:19 EDT (#)
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Ketamine will do this to you, take it easy!
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:51:43 EDT (#)
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That's what i was trying to go for. but obviously failed pretty badly.
Um. It's supposed to just be in some unidentifiable place; it's black but isn't. there's no light, but you can see. The whole environment seems shifty to the person there, but isn't necessarily, it's about perceptions.
And his mind is a garbled mess and he can't think straight, but I had to make him say sentences (sometimes) or it'd come out "pineapple juice me love you long black what the fufflekins?"
the purple-demon is peeping/watching/ laughing, and he thinks it's his friend, but he ends up being his keeper and throwing someone unknown object at the kid/guy which fucks up his shin. (supposed to be vague and not clearly alluded to, because it's not THAT important, but for the beg. of the story) but he starts all over and it never ends. pretty much the guy has not a clue what's going on at any given point, but he's essentially in an endless hell.
-----------------..... Does THAT make sense?
I a-fear it doesn't. But that's what's goin' on.
It was a dream I had, and I'm having trouble articulating it.
Clearly.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:44:59 EDT (#)
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Exactly. It is the kind of thing you might say after having far too many drugs and not being able to maintain your concentration long enough to think in straight lines, i.e. when you don't know what you are talking about.
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:42:34 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:38:15 EDT (#)
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"drifting like bunnies on viagara"
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That is, without doubt, the worst similie I have ever read. Bunnies, particularly bunnies which are fucking, do not 'drift'.
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Like saying a Burt that's not leaking down's....?
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:38:15 EDT (#)
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"drifting like bunnies on viagara"
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That is, without doubt, the worst similie I have ever read. Bunnies, particularly bunnies which are fucking, do not 'drift'.
The piece was good but was vauge and annoying. The subject matter was unclear, which was of course your intention, but that didn't really help matters.
This would have been a nice chapter to throw in there if it could have been flanked by coherent chapters that built character and setting. I am reminded of that douchebag who wrote that mess 'Pollen' and other stories that contained words like "vert". He was quite good in spite of himself.
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:31:30 EDT (#)
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Fair enough.
:D
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:30:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:28:47 BST (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:18:36 EDT (#)
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No true noob can do itallics.
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I actually tried mashing something up here and it just gets shit on.
I read Bart's thing that you can do italics and bold now. I can read? ! What?!
Formerly used to read uber a few years back but just started again and made an account, which I'm seriously regretting
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touchy bitch.
it was tongue in cheek.
rated 0 as i didn't care for it.
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:28:47 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:18:36 EDT (#)
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No true noob can do itallics.
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I actually tried mashing something up here and it just gets shit on.
I read Bart's thing that you can do italics and bold now. I can read? ! What?!
Formerly used to read uber a few years back but just started again and made an account, which I'm seriously regretting
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:19:25 EDT (#)
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Yeah, I didn't think about that little factoid.
I guess I'm that 'sexy shemale' in your book, yes.
FUCK.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:18:36 EDT (#)
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No true noob can do itallics.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-07-22 06:15:00 EDT (#)
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Okay, I read it this time. Its pretty good. But the picture ruins it, I tell ya.
So ARE you the sexy shemale or not?
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 05:43:26 EDT (#)
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Yeah, well I was looking up pics of chins...which I LOVE and I got that.
How do you think I feel?
Sad. Sad is how I felt.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-07-22 05:40:49 EDT (#)
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I don't wanna see that.
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 01:54:18 EDT (#)
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Well that's good.
I'm going to get raped on this tomorrow.
Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-07-22 01:52:03 EDT (#)
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This has given me an interesting idea.
Submitted by tatersninja (user info) at 2008-07-22 01:38:31 EDT (#)
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Yeah, I know.
Submitted by HateMudkips (user info) at 2008-07-22 01:33:36 EDT (#)
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meh