It has been several weeks since I last tried to kill Shlongy - Video Camwhore link (768 hits)
Category: HumorRating: 0.66 on 22 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Uncle B. (View user info) at 2008-07-22 11:36:42 EDT
I am starting to sound more natural on stage and use less of my public speaking voice. I forgot only 2 jokes this time but i did edit out 2 act outs that would have put me over 10 minutes when i only had 8.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6MdepKVbgtE
Enjoy, mock, criticize whatever...I am my own worst critic and have already said most of the worst stuff to myself already.
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Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-07-26 09:47:23 EDT (#)
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Heh...Peaches progeny lives on!!!
I still have his son, and my mother still has his grandaughter.
Submitted by chitowngirl (user info) at 2008-07-26 00:12:40 EDT (#)
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well, well, well. I was browsing my old posts and clicked on some users - you are still around.
I forgot my login, password and whatever email addy I used so I had to change my name.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/5861
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-07-24 16:21:40 EDT (#)
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I agree I could do a whole lot with the pot angle...but then again so are tons of other comedians.
The funniest parts of my act are usually the act-out sequences. Each of my major topics has 2-3 act-outs and those eat time like crazy. When you only have 5-8 minutes a pop, sometimes as few as 3 minutes it is difficult to get all the funny in.
Submitted by Darth_Famine (user info) at 2008-07-23 20:32:52 EDT (#)
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timing
and your material was good for a chuckle, but no real belly laughs.
you could do so much more with the pot angle.
Submitted by PayMeLater (user info) at 2008-07-23 12:42:02 EDT (#)
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My ass hurts.
Submitted by PepsiCoke (user info) at 2008-07-22 21:19:40 EDT (#)
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Nah, don't do this anymore.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-07-22 15:02:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
ugh...
Submitted by Sincere (user info) at 2008-07-22 14:20:08 EDT (#)
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Stop pausing for laughter you frickin yokel.
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-07-22 13:29:19 EDT (#)
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I agree Unabonger.
My timing has been a little off lately. I really wish I had the recording from Goodnight's in Raleigh to share with ya'll. I also have a rambling 20 minute diatribe where I am fighting for people's attention during a comedy competition that I won at Lucky B's in Raleigh...that one is a little less entertaining. Although dancing with the Lady Knights dance team from the Raleigh Knights semi-pro football team was entertaining as hell.
Submitted by Unabonger (user info) at 2008-07-22 13:01:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Your material is too rehearsed and it's starting to kill your timing. You need to create another 8 minutes of completely different jokes and try that out. Then watch both of your acts. When people laugh the most, you pick one bit. Continue this until you've merged the two acts and you have 8 minutes of fresh material from both acts. Toss the other shit in the toilet and do it all over again. That will get you laughs every ten seconds.
Good job, though. You're probably much funnier in every day situations. Carry around a pen and notepad for those brilliant moments of hilarity and incorporate them into your act.
Submitted by GangsterSquid (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:54:09 EDT (#)
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Hadley, if YOU'RE the measuring stick for the kind of audience that a comedian should pander to, the entire fucking art of stand-up is doomed.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:52:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:39:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can probably record a couple of snippets in one of our studios and shoot an MP3 to someone, if necessary, if it will help save his act.
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Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:44:12 EDT (#)
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Submitted by GangsterSquid (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:43:36 EDT (#)
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Dude, this was painful. Literally.
I think the biggest reason is that there are not enough punchlines and 'funnies' concentrated in your material.
You spend WAY too much time framing your jokes and not enough time actually delivering the funny.
Make the crowd laugh at least once every 10 seconds. If you can't do that, change up your routine.
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If that's the measuring stick, Dane Cook needs a shitload of work cuz I watched an hour of him on Comedy Central and never laughed once...
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:39:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can probably record a couple of snippets in one of our studios and shoot an MP3 to someone, if necessary, if it will help save his act.
Submitted by Cyrus (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:26:10 EDT (#)
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Yes. So many ways to say/ask "show me yer hole."
And it is, after all, the pronunciation and inflective nuances that people will hear and remember, not the fact that they were just asked to show their holes.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2008-07-22 12:15:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:42:10 EDT (#)
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Shlongy...I will try and refer to you directly the next time I am on stage.
I may even do your "Show me your hole" tagline if you'd like.
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:40:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Did Shlongy make it into the live act?
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I hereby respectfully request that Shlongy record himself properly saying The Line and post it, or send it to me. That way Uncle B can deliver the line as intended and everyone else will know how it's supposed to sound when it's typed on a post. Something as classic as "Show Me Your Hole" must not be sullied by inadvertent mispronounciation.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:55:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Getting better.
Sure there were some not so funnies, but I giggled at a few that the crowd didn't seem to get.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:47:54 EDT (#)
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'Tis better to be silent and be thought a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
But well done on getting up on the stage, and all that banter
Submitted by GangsterSquid (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:43:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Dude, this was painful. Literally.
I think the biggest reason is that there are not enough punchlines and 'funnies' concentrated in your material.
You spend WAY too much time framing your jokes and not enough time actually delivering the funny.
Make the crowd laugh at least once every 10 seconds. If you can't do that, change up your routine.
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:42:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Shlongy...I will try and refer to you directly the next time I am on stage.
I may even do your "Show me your hole" tagline if you'd like.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:40:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Did Shlongy make it into the live act?
I'll only check the link if that took place...Because short of that, I can't sit through your act, unless you are now channeling Richard Jeni.
Submitted by myshit (user info) at 2008-07-22 11:39:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
For balls.
I'll watch it and wince when I get home.